Wednesday 16 April 2014

Hold it still

While writing this particular poem I was rather upset, yet was feeling a little content, a little excited, mingled with a little fear. I didn't know how to bundle it all up. So there's two aspects to the poem. The first is rather gloomy, dark and captures the essence of fear, pain and worry. 

The second one was written a few hours later. Although I meant it to be a Stormy mixture of excitement and fear, I couldn't put the two together. The second aspect is that of thrill, fantasy and all things 'rainbows' as it was pointed out to me by my dear sister. Hope both aspects reach out to you as they do to me.

Take one:
There's a storm inside me

And its growing each day.
How do I capture it?
Hold it still.


Bubbling with fury.

Gripping with fear. 
Bursting inside. 
Hold it still.


Too many thoughts gathering,

And answers vary so. 
Questions are in my mind
Hold it still.


Flooding with insecurity. 

Weeping with pain.
Throbbing within. 
Hold it still.


For you may try and scratch, 

The surface of it all. 
Yet moving it remains.
Hold it still!


Filling with worry. 

Gasping with care. 
Hurting below
Hold it still.


Take two:
There's a storm inside me

And its growing each day.
How do I express it?
Hold it still.


Bubbling with fantasy

Gripping with fun
Bursting inside. 
Hold it still.


Too many things gathering,

And answers vary so. 
Your thoughts are in my mind
Hold it still.


Flooding with love. 

Filling with play.
Skipping within. 
Hold it still.


For you may try and touch, 

The surface of it all. 
Yet jumping it remains.
Hold it still!


Filling with tenderness. 

Gasping with care. 
Excitement below
Hold it still.

28 comments:

  1. Loved the contrast between the two parts ... beautiful :-)

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  2. ah, its beautiful how both the parts show different aspects and portray different emotions in the similar frame.
    P.s: gotta give it to your sister this time..:) The second part seems more optimistic
    loved it..:)

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  3. two shades.. and what a beautiful comparison .. awesomesauce :)

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  4. Two sides of the same coin... Amazing!!!
    I read some of your poems and you are truly amazing!!!
    I think writing poetry is truly a great talent!!!

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    1. Woah thank you for the read! Do keep visiting!

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  5. I absolutely loved the contrast here. The second part rocks!

    Your poetry is getting awesome and more awesome by the day! :)

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    1. Hehe yayies! Thank you for that awesome comment!

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  6. You have a way with your words.. they flow magically!!! I loved the poetry out and out!!! New follower :)

    ~Stri

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  7. How time changed your perceptions or thoughts...This was a good one.
    Two shades...maybe there are more :)

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  8. Wow! How a few words change with time and change in feelings is noticed. A melancholic tune changes into an optimistic and chirpy one!

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  9. Different shades of your moods as they change..the words are free-flowing creating a perfect rhythm :-)

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  10. Wow...this is fabulous!
    I just love how your mood changed from melancholic into positive...really wish I could do that sometimes.
    You are such an inspiration.
    Many thanks for sharing this wonderful piece of insight! :)

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    1. Wow thank you! Your poems are beautiful, trust me :)

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  11. Such a beautiful portrayal of change in emotions with time! That's why we shouldn't be impulsive, maybe? :)

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  12. Both of the takes can be experienced in reality. I guess, it's the age when we are bound to face such sorts of inner upheavals.

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    1. Probably, although I think age is not a matter to get these emotions.

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  13. The contrast is well portrayed. If only we could hold things still!

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  14. Ms.Parack.... You are getting better by the day!!!!

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